Woos of excitement went up as the first song of the night started to play. A sea of people down in the ball room assembling in formation ready to dance, anxious mothers peering down to keep a close eye on their precious sons and daughters who were now twirling and tapping to the music. Up on the balcony and through that window was the only way to see this glamorous hall over the sea of people. Perfectly wrapped in floral patterned wall paper and dark wood window frames filled with immaculately decorated stained glass windows. The walls were covered with foreign art and other pieces from the high profile family's many travels.
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Lucy
8/12/2015 11:48:31 am
Great story, there are a lot of good descriptive words to paint a picture in your head which I really liked, but I think you need to work on ending your story a bit better in stead of ending it quite abruptivley but I still really enjoyed it.
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Dom M
8/18/2015 09:19:30 am
Great story Liam. I especially like the description you used and all the historic details, but I feel like you rushed it at the end, as it just suddenly stops, other than that, it's a great story. Great work
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Kayla
8/20/2015 03:33:55 pm
Great job Liam! this is a very descriptive piece of writing and I had a pretty clear picture of what the place looked like. I think you need to make the story line a bit clearer because it sort of got a bit confusing at times. But other than that it was really good!
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